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shaking
quaking
twitching
itching
scratching
never relaxing
never the chance to breathe – in and …
…out the door
hit the floor
running
to a destination unknown
known to be out of reach
but still reaching for greatness
when greatness only slips
through
my
fingers

fingers that tap the table
rhythmically
sending my body
into an uncontrolled dance
of shaking
quaking
twitching
itching
scratching
never relaxing
never time to stop

my mind racing
leaving my mouth chasing
words never spoken
am I broken
on a level unknown
or is it known
but not shown
to the world
instead curled
inside my head
making me seem brain dead
but instead
my brain is more alive
it just can’t thrive
on normal levels
of non interaction
when you run away from me
scared because
I am shaking
quaking
twitching
itching
scratching
and never relaxing
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:icondemon-polecat:
I think this would be a good one to do an audio version of. The uneven rhythm and fluid segue of one concept into another (breath – in and …/…out the door, though I think 'breath' should be 'breathe'?) would lend itself well to a reading, I think.

The repetition and lack of punctuation, as well as the choppy broken lines add to the anxious feel of this poem.

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:iconvertigoart:
I am thinking of recording it tomorrow, actually. Thank you for the catch.

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:icondemon-polecat:
Anytime, and I'll keep an ear out for the audio version.

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:iconeloquent-weapon:
I can hear this with the electric guitar in the background. :)

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:iconvertigoart:
That could be cool. I was thinking of recording an audio version of this, but I am not sure yet. :)

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:iconcaroncecilia:
can't wait to hear this on audio!!

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:iconvertigoart:
:)

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:iconalwaysanunquietmind:
i can feel your writing...

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:icontyc113:
I love this.

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